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Title: Short automotive fiction story
Post by: deathsled on September 08, 2019, 12:22:43 PM
Gentlemen,  I attach a short story I recently wrote that I plan to put into print along with other automotive fiction.  I am waiting on my cover artist at the moment.  I invite you all to read this story for what it's worth and thank you.

Best,

Richard E.
Title: Re: Short automotive fiction story
Post by: Side-Oilers on September 08, 2019, 01:33:10 PM
Well done, Richard.  Clever premise. Good read.
Van
Title: Re: Short automotive fiction story
Post by: deathsled on September 08, 2019, 02:05:39 PM
Thank you very much for the review, Van.
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Post by: FL SAAC on September 08, 2019, 04:14:52 PM
exemplary
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Post by: gjz30075 on September 09, 2019, 04:55:13 AM
A good read, indeed.   Will this book be a series of short stories?    When completed, please post a link for its purchase.
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Post by: SFM6S087 on September 09, 2019, 07:45:46 AM
Holey Shamoley, did you take me in. I thought I'd read a few lines and just get a feel of this story. But noooooo! I couldn't stop reading. Extremely well done. Thank you for sharing this. I can only offer one critique. The paragraph that starts at the bottom of page 5 is too long. Needs to be divided into at least 2 paragraphs; maybe 3. Other than that - perfect. Thanks again!

Steve
Title: Re: Short automotive fiction story
Post by: deathsled on September 09, 2019, 10:10:43 AM
Thank you for the reviews, gentlemen. This will be one of the short stories added to the novella entitled The Dragon's Toll, a horror story about US 129, the Tail of the Dragon. I had an agreement with a store down there to sell the print book. Got bogged down with life but now the stories are again on the front burner. Cover art is being done and I found a printer. I will do a short run of 100 plus books to see how it does.
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Post by: kjspeed on September 09, 2019, 10:38:54 AM
Well done Richard! A quick, compelling read. ~Kevin
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Post by: deathsled on September 09, 2019, 10:41:37 AM
Thanks Kevin.
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Post by: Chad on September 09, 2019, 02:41:44 PM
I really enjoyed that!!  Well done!
Title: Re: Short automotive fiction story
Post by: deathsled on September 09, 2019, 03:20:22 PM
Holey Shamoley, did you take me in. I thought I'd read a few lines and just get a feel of this story. But noooooo! I couldn't stop reading. Extremely well done. Thank you for sharing this. I can only offer one critique. The paragraph that starts at the bottom of page 5 is too long. Needs to be divided into at least 2 paragraphs; maybe 3. Other than that - perfect. Thanks again!

Steve
You're right, Steve. That paragraph was way too long. I fixed it for the print version. Thank you!
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Post by: deathsled on September 09, 2019, 03:24:48 PM
Thank you, Chad.

Richard E.
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Post by: NC TRACKRAT on September 09, 2019, 03:27:49 PM
An accomplished wordsmith in our midst!  Nicely done!
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Post by: JD on September 10, 2019, 07:23:30 PM
Twilight Zone
Title: Re: Short automotive fiction story
Post by: TedS on September 11, 2019, 04:37:23 AM
Holey Shamoley, did you take me in. I thought I'd read a few lines and just get a feel of this story. But noooooo! I couldn't stop reading. Extremely well done. Thank you for sharing this.......

It got me too. We'll done.

Ted
Title: Re: Short automotive fiction story
Post by: csheff on September 11, 2019, 05:59:27 AM
Yes the story really sucked u in. Very well done.