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Short automotive fiction story

Started by deathsled, September 08, 2019, 12:22:43 PM

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deathsled

September 08, 2019, 12:22:43 PM Last Edit: September 08, 2019, 12:33:48 PM by deathsled
Gentlemen,  I attach a short story I recently wrote that I plan to put into print along with other automotive fiction.  I am waiting on my cover artist at the moment.  I invite you all to read this story for what it's worth and thank you.

Best,

Richard E.
"Low she sits on five spoke wheels
Small block eight so live she feels
There she's parked beside the curb
Engine revving to disturb
She's the princess from his past
Red paint gold stripes damned she's fast"

Side-Oilers

#1
September 08, 2019, 01:33:10 PM
Well done, Richard.  Clever premise. Good read.
Van
Current:
2006 FGT, Tungsten. Whipple, HRE 20s, Ohlin coil-overs. Top Speed Certified 210.7 mph.

Kirkham Cobra 427.  482-inch aluminum side-oiler. Tremec 5-spd.

Previous:
1968 GT500KR #2575 (1982-2022)
1970 Ranchero GT 429
1969 LTD Country Squire 429
1963 T-Bird Sport Roadster
1957 T-Bird E-model

deathsled

#2
September 08, 2019, 02:05:39 PM
Thank you very much for the review, Van.
"Low she sits on five spoke wheels
Small block eight so live she feels
There she's parked beside the curb
Engine revving to disturb
She's the princess from his past
Red paint gold stripes damned she's fast"

FL SAAC

#3
September 08, 2019, 04:14:52 PM
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#4
September 09, 2019, 04:55:13 AM
A good read, indeed.   Will this book be a series of short stories?    When completed, please post a link for its purchase.
Greg Z
6S2249

SFM6S087

#5
September 09, 2019, 07:45:46 AM
Holey Shamoley, did you take me in. I thought I'd read a few lines and just get a feel of this story. But noooooo! I couldn't stop reading. Extremely well done. Thank you for sharing this. I can only offer one critique. The paragraph that starts at the bottom of page 5 is too long. Needs to be divided into at least 2 paragraphs; maybe 3. Other than that - perfect. Thanks again!

Steve

deathsled

#6
September 09, 2019, 10:10:43 AM
Thank you for the reviews, gentlemen. This will be one of the short stories added to the novella entitled The Dragon's Toll, a horror story about US 129, the Tail of the Dragon. I had an agreement with a store down there to sell the print book. Got bogged down with life but now the stories are again on the front burner. Cover art is being done and I found a printer. I will do a short run of 100 plus books to see how it does.
"Low she sits on five spoke wheels
Small block eight so live she feels
There she's parked beside the curb
Engine revving to disturb
She's the princess from his past
Red paint gold stripes damned she's fast"

kjspeed

#7
September 09, 2019, 10:38:54 AM
Well done Richard! A quick, compelling read. ~Kevin
1968 Shelby GT350
1968 Mustang GT S-code
2009 Mustang Bullitt

deathsled

#8
September 09, 2019, 10:41:37 AM
Thanks Kevin.
"Low she sits on five spoke wheels
Small block eight so live she feels
There she's parked beside the curb
Engine revving to disturb
She's the princess from his past
Red paint gold stripes damned she's fast"

Chad

#9
September 09, 2019, 02:41:44 PM
I really enjoyed that!!  Well done!

deathsled

#10
September 09, 2019, 03:20:22 PM
Quote from: SFM6S087 on September 09, 2019, 07:45:46 AM
Holey Shamoley, did you take me in. I thought I'd read a few lines and just get a feel of this story. But noooooo! I couldn't stop reading. Extremely well done. Thank you for sharing this. I can only offer one critique. The paragraph that starts at the bottom of page 5 is too long. Needs to be divided into at least 2 paragraphs; maybe 3. Other than that - perfect. Thanks again!

Steve
You're right, Steve. That paragraph was way too long. I fixed it for the print version. Thank you!
"Low she sits on five spoke wheels
Small block eight so live she feels
There she's parked beside the curb
Engine revving to disturb
She's the princess from his past
Red paint gold stripes damned she's fast"

deathsled

#11
September 09, 2019, 03:24:48 PM
Thank you, Chad.

Richard E.
"Low she sits on five spoke wheels
Small block eight so live she feels
There she's parked beside the curb
Engine revving to disturb
She's the princess from his past
Red paint gold stripes damned she's fast"

NC TRACKRAT

#12
September 09, 2019, 03:27:49 PM
An accomplished wordsmith in our midst!  Nicely done!
5S071, 6S1467

JD

#13
September 10, 2019, 07:23:30 PM
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TedS

#14
September 11, 2019, 04:37:23 AM
Quote from: SFM6S087 on September 09, 2019, 07:45:46 AM
Holey Shamoley, did you take me in. I thought I'd read a few lines and just get a feel of this story. But noooooo! I couldn't stop reading. Extremely well done. Thank you for sharing this.......

It got me too. We'll done.

Ted
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